A girl, who just left her dolls
but yet to feel the blush of youth,
stands on the terrace of her home...
her cheek gets tickled
by the first rain drop of the season...
Overjoyed she looks to the sky....
wants to get drenched completely.....
may be that's the time,
she knows what SHE is.
The clouds were dark,
(or was it her first lover
dark and handsome ?)
the breeze brought
the fragrance of wild flowers;
she closed her eyes to feel it.
Those first few drops on the dry soil,
worked up the aroma...
(that beautiful fragrance of the wet soil,
which nothing can match in this world)
"Ah"! she said, "today it's gonna rain,
my first rain, and my first dream to be loved"....
She swirls in ecstasy......
round goes her long, flowery skirt,
with the little anklets tinkling with rhythm;
Off goes her ribbon,
which just kept her hair so tight.....
her arms stretched wide open,
she closes her eyes,
and faces her lover in the sky...
the dark dark cloud
with a smile,
anticipating the cold rain drops on her face,
she swirls once, swirls again,
and again and again........
But not a drop of rain......
not a single drop.
Her emotions are suspended - somewhere in between,
just like those rain drops,
which so wanted to reach her,
but are suspended in the air now.
She can see, she knows its for her,
but can't reach them, can't touch them.
She stays there
with her skirt, which just went round in a circle
clinging to her with force
before settling down.
She looks up at the sky
with hair still flowing.
It's a suspended emotion
for both of them
no one knows the reason why...
two lovers have to stay away
is it a choice or is it destiny?
all she knows is that
her lover has suspended emotions.
RESTLESS
24 comments:
A dark cloud to dark and handsome , what metaphor !!!!! lovely ...
Amazing read!:)
u top urself wit every post, dont u? :) .. nice one.
Beautifully written! Not everyone can twine those lovely words and make it a memorable poem. You should write more such. Thumbs up lady!!
awesome title restless..." suspended emotion" gr8 thinking
great suspended emotions.I really like the title.
This defines you. This is you. You should write poetry more often.
Restless, I am speechless!
this is beautiful.....
Though I was not quite comfortable with poems in school, and am not even now, but I still loved it because every verse of your beautiful composition created a beautiful picture in my mind everytime! :)
emotional
beautiful lines
nice poem
Loved the title; loved the poem. The feelings and the metaphors are so well etched and the scene is so vivid, it was a joy to read.
There is a technical thesis to this - "resistance to change": the property of a body by which it remains at rest or continues moving in a straight line unless acted upon by a directional force. No wonder the emotions too live by that definition of INERTIA!!!
Loved reading through though.
Only 2 words... suspended emotions... thats enough to express and summarize the poem... love the dilly dally; and the hitch and flow..
for me the rain drops were lovers and the dark clouds match makers...you just gave the whole picture a new perspective...brilliant and exotic...can feel each drop at my finger tips even in this rainless night.
soooper
very well written
Thank you so much readers, ur words are very precious for me. Would like to thank and respond to you all one on one, please watch this space in two days. A Heartfelt thanks again!
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@ Bhairavi - :), am glad u liked it!
@ Raksha bhat - thanks and welcome dear!
@ Mayank - don't know! u tell?!
@ Vaish - am so happy u liked it! even ur expression is so beautiful!
@ Mag - hey thanks Mag!
@ Pratibha - thanks dear!
@ Purba, u r right, shall try for that!
@ RS - oh really! wow!
@ magiceye and sm - thanks!!
@ hey niket - i know poetry can be lousy to bear at times, am glad u like mine!! thanks a ton!
@ D2- nice to get this from u! thanks!
@ Mohan - welcome! oh but I thought gravitational force works on all, just as love!
@ dattaabhishek - am glad someone talked about the movement and flow! thanks!
@ wanderer - wow! how beautifully expressed! and matchmakers!!never thought like that! thanks and welcome!
@ Md Muddassir Shah- thanks a ton!! am so glad!
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just so.. beautiful !!!!!
Felt I was listening to some song! beautiful! :)
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Thanks!
Suspended Emotion so nicely being narrated with beautiful words.
Nice one.
btw this is my blog link http://ranju-psalmoflife.blogspot.com/
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